Well the plot is good but the spelling & word choice errors seem to get worse with each chapter, I think I noticed at least 7 various goofs in this chapter alone, some seem to be fixed now though. I think you had Kirara's name spelled correctly in previous chapters but in this chapter it's spelled Kiarar, usually people spell it either Kirara or Kilala.
okay as an avid reader, i hafta ask:
1. Why ddint miroku just subdue inuyasha in the village?
2. If what Sesshomaru says is true, then when did he leave her for a month after they got together? Wouldnt that have killed the pup too?
good chapter. update when you can. Thanks.
Lady Nefertiti.
Tsuki (Chapter 3) - Sat 16 Oct 2010
I am so glad you made this into a chapter story!!!! :D It is awesome!!!! :D
they should sutra Yusha! and how could he think to punish kagome? Spoiled brat! >:l I hope she sits him until he's broken! though i kidna hope that SK get along better too!
lmao =x awesome! *goes on to next chapter!
Sala (Chapter 2) - Fri 15 Oct 2010
Cute fic. A bit brief and blunt, but enjoyable none the less. You may wish to hunt around on the dokuga forum for a beta-reader, though, as your fic has numerous spelling errors.
I'm glad you decided to make this a story. :) can't wait for you to update!!!
lol.....love it. perhaps you could make a sequel to this? **Saving to favs.**
kogazgirl29 (Chapter 1) - Fri 15 Oct 2010
i seriously think that you should make this into a story.
aj (Chapter 1) - Thu 14 Oct 2010
lolz love it love it want more off it, that's what Kiyah says. hehehe
might make a good story... or at least a two shot
Tsuki (Chapter 1) - Thu 14 Oct 2010
Haha I liked that, the ending was funny! :D Good Job!
lmao OMG you should continue this!
Very cute I think you could make it into a full blown story :D
Nooo! don't make it a oneshote.
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