Reviews for I am Alpha! by Hairann

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Kathy (Chapter 10) - Mon 25 Dec 2023

I like the story and glad I found it. I personally don't like the first person, experience it jumps POVs and it's inconsistent. The scenes also jump around and it's hard to tell what is happening. So the flow is off. Same goes for the translation of words. 

 

My biggest pet peeve would have to be Kagome. I find her annoying and all over the place. She talks about being a good leader and giving everyone a chance, but she is quick to throw insults and make fun of Kikyo with everyone else. 

 

How is Kikyo going to see her differently if she's being made fun of by the leader. Not that I agree or even like Kikyo, but you win people over with honey. Kagome also makes dumb decisions at times. I understand this is the first book out of three so I plan on reading the rest. 

 

Thanks for the story! 


LadyoftheLemons (Chapter 10) - Wed 20 Feb 2019

So much left unresolved 


sr (Chapter 8) - Tue 06 Mar 2018

loved this chapter :)


MythMagykFae (Chapter 10) - Wed 02 Sep 2015

Love! Just lots and lots of love for this story!


MythMagykFae (Chapter 7) - Wed 02 Sep 2015

Oh my freakin God this is possibly the best line i have EVER seen against Kikyo!!!!! "Everything starts out with a rough draft." Love it!


Asanobara (Chapter 1) - Thu 08 May 2014

Looks pretty darn good so far :) I do have two suggestions though: It was a bit difficult to tell when one scene stopped and the other started, so you might want to add either a line or some sort of special page-break symbol so it's less confusing. Second, instead of defining each word individually when it comes up, I think it would be better to put a key at the beginning or end. Now, chapter 2, here I come!


Aryos (Chapter 10) - Wed 19 Mar 2014

Love the story! Thank you for sharing your work.


KanadeBlossom (Chapter 3) - Mon 09 Dec 2013

This is really interesting! My only complaint is that you keep putting translations after almost every japanese word, even if you did with the same word before. It's really annoying and disrupts the flow of the mood. But otherwise, great use of the characters, of making them seem realistic yet also making them your own.


satuross (Chapter 7) - Sun 10 Nov 2013

are you dead? will all teh fics never be updated anymore? please tell us T_T


Knight of Disorder (Chapter 1) - Thu 19 Jan 2012

I like the idea, really do. You have some talent, but in first person you the "I" far to often. There are many ways to go about phrasing, neglecting them has lowered the work slightly. I still like it but I can't get around it, if you do ever revise it or edit it I would gladly take a shot at reading it agian. I will have it bookmarked however, I may give it a shot again in the future.


Karli (Chapter 10) - Mon 16 Jan 2012

that was great i am going to read the next one


mia (Chapter 4) - Fri 13 Jan 2012

really cool story i absolutely love it but what's a are flames never heard about it before   


silvertigress (Chapter 10) - Thu 22 Sep 2011

Great fic! I thought it was very unique and creative!


Pandora (Chapter 10) - Fri 29 Jul 2011

Bravo!!! Now here's the thing, i've known about ur story for so long that i'm ashamed to admit i've put it off until recently. The reson? Well i just can't stand the POV. Nothing against your writting style, it's just a personal issue for me. That being the case i regret ever putting this story on hold!! It was hard to get past the first two chapters but after a while i didn't feel bothered at all by the POV. I loved this story, there is nothing at to not like really. Asides from a few spelling errors everything was quite perfect. :) So, i am now off to read the sequels!! Ciao!!! :D


Kimi Rain Matsu (Chapter 2) - Sun 10 Apr 2011

i was almost in tears...good job...i am onto the next chapter...this is gonna be a long night


wickedone43 (Chapter 10) - Fri 04 Jun 2010

I just had to read this one over again.  I just love it!  I am so very glad you have continuede to write fics.  You are very good at it.  If you ever need someone to help with the grammatic of and/or editing, let me know.  My email can be found in the profile area.  If not see below:

43bags@sbcglobalnet


Kono Ama (Chapter 10) - Sun 23 May 2010

I loved it! It was nice that Kikyo was finally understanding her actual place in the pack and accepting it. I can't wait to read the second part of the Alpha stories!


Kono Ama (Chapter 3) - Sat 22 May 2010

There is another thing I don't like when reading this story. You don't mark when you go to another 'scene' or make a significant amount of space to indicate you are going to someone else's point of view or what have you. It is very confusing and very annoying. Other than that though, I like the story so far. Just waiting for the actual Alpha stuff to happen.


Kono Ama (Chapter 1) - Fri 21 May 2010

I liked the prologue, but what I didn't care for was that it was in first person. Other than that, everything was interesting to read and it was only the first chapter! ^_^ Though I am bummed about most of her family being murdered...


jojo661538 (Chapter 10) - Wed 27 Jan 2010

this is a great story keep up the great work ^_^


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