it was an amusing chapter! it was funny to read their sarcastic or 'cutting' remarks to each other! can't wait to read more!^^
how will sesshomaru be reacting now that the 'heat' passed? will they cross path again really soon? (can't wait for that) how will they act?
Thanks for the update! So during the mating session with Sess she absorbed his youki? was he forcing her to take it in? Why if it would only supress her miko powers? I noticed a few things in the story and am making notes in the review. Hope I'm helping.
For the next two days you will (remove: be here) remain here like you are expected unless you want this Sesshomaru’s beast (to) have a field day in (remove: the in) that town nearby, the one you obviously came from.”
(Capital O)one of your breast could be cut off as planned before and-”
He blinked uncaringly before shrugging of(f) her very logical concern for her well-being.
Kagome bit back a snarl that shouldn’t have been able to (remove: be able to) be made from a humans throat.
“(Capital H)how do you know all this?” She grumbled.
“You think you are the first to take on too much youki after a season has finished(?).”
Red bolts (of) youki skipped across the surface of the water like a current.
She looked at him loathingly and Kagome could swear (she could) hear the evil smirk in his words even as his face remained blank.
This time he did smirk, “No”(.)
Overall the chapter was pretty good. When does JiJi and Sin show up again? What will happen when Sin meets Kagome and realizes she's been taken? How will Sess react? I am soooo curious!
akikodiedra (Chapter 9) - Tue 22 Dec 2009
I have to tell you that I haven't laughed this hard while reading a fanfic in a long long long time, so let me start with thank you for that XD. Now continuing, this is one of the most original story I have come across, I LOVE Jiji and his shit-eating smile. I love Kuro and I cried when he passed on, but most of all I love how well Kagome has developed as a character. Her interactions with your original character has made her development truely believable and I can't wait for the rest of the story. Update soon please!
O_O-! OMG! I sooooooooooooo wasn't expecting that. I can't wait to see the after math. Nice fight scene...
leckie (Chapter 12) - Tue 15 Dec 2009
can't wait for more x
omg fairy likey! lol i would be your beta if i knew what it means lol. but keep it up and please update soon. lol its getting goooood. lol.
when are you going to update? i really love your story....
omg great story so far lol. its on my favorites list lol. i been up since 5 am this morning trying to finish this story but this is how far ive gotten lol. so far its awesome. but is sin coming back? i love sin lol. also love sessy but right now sin is just the next best thing lol.
I love this story. This is one of the best I've seen in this site. Keep on writing. :)
Fluffy (Chapter 12) - Fri 11 Dec 2009
Hello, Dear.
This is your lovery beta.
I wanted to apologize for leaivng you in the dust. You see, I have started school again and I don't have much time for beta reading. I love doing it, but at this time, it is near-impossible. And on top of school, I am trying to write a trilogy and finish other writings of mine before I post them again.
But you really don't need a beta all that badly. Your writing has become a ton better, although a few things (like punctuation) could be fized here and there.
You can still send me chapters. It doesn't mean I will get them done quickly, but they will be done. My Crhistmas break is coming up in the next week, and then I am home free for a good two weeks. I could get a ton done with this then, if you want.
If you don't, I understand.
I told another person I beta for, this. I just forgot to tell you. I apologize. Things like that slip my mind easily.
Love,
Fluffy
stars (Chapter 12) - Fri 11 Dec 2009
please updata
Geminilily (Chapter 12) - Fri 11 Dec 2009
hello!
this is my first time reviewing on this site, hope it goes okay. anyway i read your fic from the start and i love the originality. you put an new spin on the kagome leaves the group despite it starting the same way most are: kagome stupidly rushing off with little potection. then it got interesting, until this chapter. i was kinda disappionted that it went in the cliche of kagome finding a sesshoumaru in heat and mindlessly try fighting back, only to be attacked anyway. at it least it was not completely rape( i hate those rape then i am in love fic's). but it wasn't con either, i guess it's between noncon and cons??. i am glad she did fight back, although it would have been smarter to take off her seals before finding him since she feared him the moment she felt his aura or at least taking out her weapons (all that training for nothing). did sesshoumaru even know who she was???. any way, since you did use the cliche how about continuing using it; after i finish the chapter, i though 'what if she became pregnant and the baby was Kuro( which she recognized right away because thier souls are the same). that would be so cool!!. so i hope you would consider that an option. i also hope you would bring in more suitors to give sesshomaru competition( with other fic's it is always kagome gets rape, pregnant, and then having to deal with sesshoumaru's other women).
Anyway thanks for updating, i look forward to the next Chapter!!:D
This was an awsome chapter and I think you did fine w/out a beta so don't worry! Keep up the good work!
*~Sesshoumarucrazy~*
bluefire (Chapter 3) - Fri 11 Dec 2009
Like the story, watching to see where you take it. So far really good.
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