This chapter made or a interestig opening act for you fanfic.. I'm hooked. NICE WORK
I love you.
Oh, sorry did I say that? I meant, oh my goodness, you've done it again! I really love your story, and I was really happy to find that this chapter was longer (more to enjoy! yay). Goodness, the way you write, I feel like a little kid being read a bedtime story, every word flows so smoothly into the story, I absolutely love it.
I can't wait to see what you have in store for us. as I sit here pondering what possibly may happen next, I begin to wonder if sesshy's poison will have and odd affects on Kagome as far as his youkai changing anything about her, and if maybe Kagome's Reki will allow her to have some sort of sight later or will be something that acts as an awerness of people and things around her. Will we be seeing if/how pack structure affects Kagome? And what about the dominate alpha demanding submission from his pack? there are just so many possibilities! I'm excited to hear what you come up with.
I really hope that my long reviews don't bore you, I know that since I've started posting here, I've been dying for some feedback and it's made me realize that I can't be the only writer here who feels that way!
Once again, I seem to be at a loss on things for you to improve, I read for the big picture, so I tend to correct any mistakes with out realizing, and when I read your story, I don't even have time to sort through it for errors because I don't want to take away any from the expierence! Goodness.. ummm.... no I'm sorry, I can't think of anthing to improve, so you're on your own there.
Love love love love love love...
Hope to see the nect chapter out soon! Keep up the wonderful work!
~Mizui
Ugh! What a place to end...I sure hope you update soon. This got interesting from chapter 1 - congrats as usually my interest doesn't kick in until later, if it ever does. Very interesting twist of plot at the end of chapter 2 as well...sooooooo....please update soon! (did I already say that? What? Oh! I did say that!) ~^.^~
Poor Kagome, why can't she go to the future to get healed? Keep it coming.
Anonymous (Chapter 2) - Tue 31 Jul 2012
Great Story so far :) Just keep updating, and i shall be happy :)
Sine48 (Chapter 2) - Tue 31 Jul 2012
I like where you're going with this. Please continue.
So far so good. I wonder what will happen now?
Love it! I can't wait to see what happens next!
What ever happened to her bag? Don't forget it because it's got modern things in it!
-Forgotten!
This story sounds interesting, keep it coming.
This was very well written. I'm curious to know if Kagome will have any permanent damage from the poison. Glad you decided to begin posting here at Dokuga!
"The Western Lord ignored the lack of honorific crouched beside the priestess's body." You need an and or at least a comma in between honorific and crouched.
So far, that's the only mistake I've noticed.
Mizui (Chapter 1) - Sat 28 Jul 2012
Oh my.. I am speachless. Stunned even. I was so into the story that I right away tried to jump to the next chapter. I am heartbroken that there isn't one yet!
I just don't even know what to say to you. Earlier today I made a bit of a fuss about reviewing and now here I am struggling to do so...
Okay I'll give my best shot. Your writing is excelent, much better than mine I have to adimit, and it is obvious to me that this is not your first writing expierence. I am also writing my first InuYasha fanfiction at the moment, but so far in yours I can not tell that it is your first. Everything flowed so smoothly and I am excited to find out what changed in Kagome while she was away.
I'm also dying to know... will Kagome remain blind the rest of the rest of the story? What a neat twist that would be...
Let me see, the only problem I had with this chapter was length, but I suppose you could make up for it by updating quickly. ;]
Other than that, I absolutely loved this first chapter, and I can't wait to hear more from you!
(If I tell you I'm holding my breath, will you update quickly? because I already am anxious to get the next chapter...)
Hope to hear from you soon, keep up the awesome work!
Wow. The way you just snagged me into the story, just wow. i want to keep reading! Please continue!!
Tasha (Chapter 1) - Sat 28 Jul 2012
It looks great so far. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
KT (Chapter 1) - Sat 28 Jul 2012
Ha ha that was hillarious... be warned ... I play with lightning!
Well jokes aside, I love your chapter! Hope Sesshoumaru's healer can get the spikes out. Poor Kagome
Love it! I look forward to seeing what happens next!
-Forgotten!
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