This is such a good stoy so cute keep it up can't wait to see what happens next.
Congratulations on your first attempt at a fanfiction! (An exciting feeling, no? :D)
I love the concept of this particular story. Although, I would say that this is more an Alternate Universe (AU) and less Canon work as they seem to have been placed in an unusual situation that did not happen within the canon series. (Kagome, Sesshomaru, Miroku, Sango, and Hojo all attending college in modern times.)
Also, it seems a bit rushed. Kagome and Omega/Sesshomaru have only known each other for "a few days" and yet they are very close. He calls her "little one" which is highly affectionate and offers to protect her, transfer colleges (not always easy), and move to an apartment nearby just because Hojo got a little carried away with his emotions? It just feels like things are going somewhat too quickly. It might be nice if you tried to flesh out the story a little and give some more motivations for their actions, perhaps through some relationship building. (Maybe by having them remember their past conversations?)
Keep working on this and I am sure it will only get better!
~Z
Itoe (Chapter 3) - Mon 16 May 2011
Oh wow, good story!! lol I like the idea very much! ]:D I hope he will beat the crap out of Hojo... xD lol
CandIcane (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011
Your story is really good I cannot wait for the next post , and I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take this. Keep up the good work.
love it, thanks for the great storym keep up the great work, cant wait til next chapter, please hurry with it.:D
ooo... Sess gets to kick some Hojo butt, I hope. :) Can't wait to see where you take this. Please update again soon!
So I'm really intrigued about this story. It has alot of potential and a really solid story line so I cant wait to see what you come up with for the up-comming chapters for this story. KEEP UP THE GRET WORK! :3
kathryn (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011
very interesting story can't wait to read more
violet (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011
i reallyy like how this story is turning out keep up the good work =)
kashi (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011
>.< eww hojo, that guy gives me the creeps too *shudders*. he does need a good butt kicking doesn't he lol. i'll be waiting to read more ^^.
kashi (Chapter 1) - Mon 16 May 2011
XD i'm loving this story already and can't wait for more.
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