Anyone who may say this fic is boring...in any chapters is certainly not understanding that sometimes a writer needs to let what the story dictates be written and I have yet to find anything truly wrong or boring with this fic.
The drama is excellent, leaving us on the edge to want more, to know these two characters more, why they react and feel as they do. It's always hard for me to hear when someone puts a fic down. If I can sense something good in a writer I try to encourage them to continue their skill.
Writing publicly is not an easy thing to do. I believe in kind critisism. Tell the writer with tack and honesty where they have a problem and it's best to do this in a personal message.
I know you said your first language isn't English and that was a good thing to let us know so we who know our language can be a little more tolerent of mistakes. You'll find Dokugans are usually very kind in reviews and will help whenever possible.
I love how this fic puts Kagome as a professional sexual favors expert and she still held her virginity. I have a hard time calling her a prostitute or whore because she's not having sex for profit. She's doing mostly foreplay without going the rest of the way. She knows what she doing and why and she holds herself highly, professionally, and with dignity and she demands respect.
Sesshoumaru was very respectful and professional in handling his times with her. He followed her rules and when he found she hadn't had full on sex with a male he decided she needed to experience this with someone she cared for as human women do hold their first time as memorable. He was being kind in that respect but she took it wrong, got angry, and she did go on a real date with a human and she didn't like it so she got drunk so she could handle what she was doing. That was wrong of her. Getting drunk just to get through the date and allow the guy to have his way with her was her fault only not Sesshoumaru's. If she truly wanted sex with Sesshoumaru I'm sure if she told him sooner of her affection for youkai and her desire for him to take her virginity might have swayed his descision like it did when she finally told him.
Kagome creates alot of her arguements with him in my opinion. Sesshoumaru is usually not a chatty person, true, but he was trying to show her how she isn't faceless and unimportant but a beautiful, sexy woman who deserves to enjoy the whole experience of having sex. She unknowingly kept fueling his desire to see her and be with. Now love is in the air and both are denying this so fiercely because the world says it's wrong.
She thought that taking other customers would keep her from feeling anything toward Sesshoumaru was foolish. The heart will always feel what it feels and no amount of denial will help and he's inuyoukai and Taiyoukai at that. She's been around long enough to know that dogs are territorial and possessive and seeing her hurt hurts him and his anger is primal and in his nature. She may think she belongs to no one but she's wrong, oh so wrong. She belongs to Sesshoumaru just as much as her heart feels love and want and need to be only with him.
I see more claiming and permanently marking her to keep other youkai at bay coming very soon. She has to make arrangements to make him exclusive or there may be blood spilled for her being hurt. Being abused should not come with the job but in reality there are brutal people out there who care less. She had someone who not only cares but is gentle and loves to give her her own pleasure not just his.
Great fic. Love it all. I hope to read other fics from you here on Dokuga.
JEN
j (Chapter 8) - Mon 28 Mar 2016
This is a awesome story
Aww man! You had me in tears reading the end of this chapter. They have to stop fighting their love! She's gotta stop this insane life.
Awesome job! I will be keeping an eye out for this story regularly.
Miss C (Chapter 5) - Mon 28 Mar 2016
We do leave reviews. This is a great story.
Silver (Chapter 5) - Mon 28 Mar 2016
Fantastic writing, keep going!! :3
are the chapters after the first ones flash backs that kagome are having on how her and sesshomaru met? other than that question I really enjoy this story. It is great.
Morgan (Chapter 5) - Mon 28 Mar 2016
Love it! What a refreshing romantic chemistry you've made between Sess and Kags! Please update soon!
Holy smokes batman! Superman and lois are getting frisky! I absolutely love your plot and character dynamics. Im very interested to see where this goes. Please keep up the wonderful work!
Wow! I love stories that are realistic and told by great storytellers. Great plot! Look forward to more!
Lammy (Chapter 1) - Sun 27 Mar 2016
Great story! I am looking forward to the futuee chapters! Both characters are so well written and I love how you had Maru's character ask for Kagome's explicit permission.
Zyren (Chapter 1) - Sun 27 Mar 2016
I really like this so far. I also appreciate that even though Kagome is a sex worker Sesshoumaru made it a point to consider her pleasure and ask her consent. I'm interested to see how their relationship progresses and that little tidbit about her being a miko and why it affected him that way.
Welcome to Dokuga!
Alashia (Chapter 1) - Sun 27 Mar 2016
Great story can't for more updates!
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