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Yes, serious beta work needed. This story is very confusing and thats only made worse by the time jumps. The whole story needs to be edited, big time.
girl-animate- Thu 12 Jul 2007
| dude please put the next chap its getin intrestin twist and turns at every end pleassssseeeeee hurry till later
amara- Mon 28 Aug 2006
| i can't believe you stopped there....... >. my god... *shakes angry fist* ... update!?!
Aurora Antheia Raine- Sun 27 Aug 2006
| Well, the overall story is pretty interesting... but I just have one question about the fourth chapter... What happened to Rin?! @_@ One minute she was clinging onto Kagome in the hospital bed... then Kagome and Sesshoumaru started talking and she just poofed and disappeared... allowing Kag and Sess to make out and stuff... @_@
Kjinuyasha- Sun 27 Aug 2006
| WOW! I'm hlaf confused... and the rest I'm just left mystifyed... is that a word???? LOL But I'm enjoting it... yes... my mind's doing cartwheels of anticipation and confussion... but it just makes me wanna read even more.... so ignore the comment I sent you because when I came back and finished reading... a few of my uncertainties were answered... Are there a lot of spelling errors in this review??? OH well me no care anymore.... LOL my guyfriend was telling me just a few seconds ago not to dwell on the bad things.... sooooooooooooo what's better than to engulf my mind in some wonderfuly written fanfiction... athough it was a little... dark in some areas.... my mind is most deff.. somewhere else.
Morgan- Thu 24 Aug 2006
| Wonderful story! I'm excited to read more. ^_^. Good job.
Samantha- Wed 23 Aug 2006
| Update soon! Peace.
| Please update soon this was a great chapter..I want to shoot kikyo and her daddy
Azmaira- Wed 23 Aug 2006
| This is a good story...plese write more
Megan Consoer- Tue 22 Aug 2006
| I really ike this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
| Awsome-ness! Please update soon, and e-mail me when you do!!! *Smart_girl46360@yahoo.com*
swtdrm01- Tue 08 Aug 2006
Cool! When's the next chapter?
Ja ne
helikesitheymikey!- Tue 08 Aug 2006
just one thing...................................
...............................COULD YOU PLEASE TAKE OFF THE THINGY THAT WON'T ALLOW ANONYMOUS
REVIEWS ON FANFIC DOT NET!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
you would get alot more reviews....
by the way nothing bad had better happen to Rin in the next chapters on fanfic dot net.
please update on fanfic dot net!!!!!!!!!!!!!
christina- Tue 08 Aug 2006
| that was great don't make us wait to long for more!
| WELL I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE PLEASE UPDATE SOON
Sankontesou- Tue 08 Aug 2006
| this story is great..please update soon
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