Ok so I read this and the explanations but it didn't really help me. I can see how this would be an alternate reality and things turned out different because she traveled with Sesshomaru. Your new turns were excellent BUT then you said it was rushed! After righting such a ling story, we only get like 5mins of Kags and Sess love? Are you kidding me, there was so much more room for that even during the swimsuit scene. Smh this was really like the anime all fight, and barley any love scenes. Urghh I was a little frustrated I admit. It's like I was waiting for something big then poof nada lol. :(
That was a fantastic read. I also really liked your approach to characters like Kouga, Miroku, and Sango. With the changes made to the beginning of the story, there is no reason for any of them to ever work together or interact in a positive way.
I going to leave my review on the last part on LJ but since you put it here, I figured I might as well do it here :)
First of all, wow thank you. I did not expect such a long tale! And I do love how you twisted the prompt and made it your own!
Canon divergence is always my favorite. And I love how Kagome helps to bring Rin into this new little pack. Ahah and you write Jaken flawlessly. I like the way you used Kagome's little recap to let us know what Sesshomaru says. It left a bit of a mystery every time!
And you threw Kouga in there, my favorite ahha. Alright, he's still cocky Kouga in there, but ahha. I mean, wow. He's not in love with Kagome when she takes the shard from him huh? Ahha. Darker Kouga.
It's sweet to see how Kagome cares for Rin immediately! I love it, I mean it's a natural trait of hers... so obviously. It makes you think of when she met Shippo!
I seriously love how you take this and the Inuyasha tale and made it your own. The way Kagome meets everyone in the story is fantastic and it's as perfect as in the show!
Mean Inuyasha always makes me sad... in a good way though! Because he could have always gone that way. And you wrote it beautifully!
Your little notes at the end make a lot of sense and it just proves how much thinking went into this. You think the beginning of this tale and made it yours completely. Seriously, this would have been a fun show to watch.
And I do not think his feelings were rushed. You are right, little hints everywhere. He was bound to fall for the weird girl who pulled his father's sword ahah.
It was an amazing story and a beautiful gift.
Thank you!
I really liked the story, though I thought the ending was a bit rushed (and that was the best part!) and throughout the story it was hard to 'relate' to Sesshomaru's charactar because you only know what he says because Kagome translates it. It just seemed kind of unnatural for her to keep repeating what he said, it generally annoys me very much when people do that. But overall I really loved how you handled Miroku, Sango etc. and I always enjoy stories with Sesshomaru in his Dog form.