In my opinion, you don't need to "brush up" on your lemon skills, because you are already great! :D

woo hoo! what a hot one ;)

I see maybe a series of related shots in the making; that would definitely help you improve on your already amazing skills :).

Try experimenting with different roles, not just classic ones. While they are entertaining - the boss and the secretary, the principal/teacher and the student, the older brother and the younger girl -, new roles will help you to further branch out your writing skills when it comes to lemons.

Overall, job well done!

-fans self- what steamy read, bravo!!! And sort quirky too, maybe a series of related one shots?

damn, after reading that, i don't think i'll be able to sleep....that was HAWT!!!!!!