aaawww!! i'm nearly in tears! beautifully written and i hope sessomaru does find kagome again, everybody deservers a second chance, great strory by the way :)
Nicely done though it does need a bit of work, it's not bad for a beginner, however, I would suggest making your sentences longer. Instead of having a lot of short sentences, try combineing some of them as it will help the paragraphs for flow better.
I wish you much luck in your future writing.
Hairann
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