Very interesting with the fip-floping point of view. It was interesting to see their initial take on each other as well. I would love to see this continued and see how they come to achknowledge one other.

I love the way you go back and forth giving us her immediate impression of him and his first impression of her. Giving us little glimpses into what they are each thinking.  It sounds like they both are instantly attracted to each other, but unsure whether they like it or not. Good job.

An interesting start of something.  Both characters are anticipating something and when they come in contact, they each have such different responses.  I like how you've conveyed their views of one another in their own minds.  Intriguing!

Ahhh. Poor Jakken. Would love to see some dialogue if continued. :)