The storyline seems good but it's worded oddly, or the sentences are strung together funny thoughout the whole thing. Like here; Sesshomaru saw no pleasure in moon gazing, he rather trained with his sword or patrolled the land. the second bit sounds odd it would be better as something like; he'd rather train with his sword or patrol the land.  It being center aligned it's a wee bit hard to read, I copy/pasted it into a word doc to left align it.

Maybe see if you can get an English speaker to go over it & fix the odd sentence structure/wording?

Just as an FYI an Inugami is a sort of spirit servant dog, supposedly created by torturing & killing a dog in some kind of ritualistic way.