not bad ... the last line, "Well looks like we are going to be going West", i think ucould have said "well looks like we're going to the West" and than, Kagome smiled. “Yes, to the west we go!”, yeah that sounds a little OFC ... but i guess it okay cause she has gotta older ..

but ur story is  not bad

bye

Good start so far...keep up the great work and update as often as you can.

i like how kagome is a wuss in this 1 and i like the story so far please dont make kagome into a youkai thats so overdone  update soon please

INtereshting infrereshting.... (yes i know thats not how you spell it) ^_^

Oh, you must keep going! I'm hooked!