Hahaha I love Rin!... Hey, did they just mate? lol 'cause that would piss off Kagome xD Update soon please!
This was wonderful. It was perfect to read in one sitting without making myself nuts or having to get up and do something. I love the thought of Sesshoumaru hiding himself from her to get close, and you did a wonderful job of making Kagome's fear of dogs real. The lemon was great. Annnnnd this is why I don't often leave reviews, because I've run out of things to say and am about to spiral into more 'this was wonderful's. It was though, very good.
I did notice quite a few little errors throughout, and I think most, if not all, of them were merely typos. Do you have a beta? If not, I recommend getting once because it is so hard to see those little booboos in your own writing. Even as is, though, they aren't bad enough to take away from the reading experience. Great job!
I absolutely adore this fiction. Kagome running into Sesshoumaru in Dog form was a perfect climax. Her sense of betrayal and shock was heart wrenching. Yet the description of the dog demon whimpering as if upset that he'd scared her was really touching.
I also loved how Sesshoumaru was protective towards her thorughout the whole story. The sense of his canine tendencies really came through quite apparently and clearly.
Then ending with them in the 'knot' or 'tie' was perfect. How they were drawn to one another and she realized he never would hurt her. Your writing is captivating and your characterizations brilliant.
*smirks* hot!
Cinne (Chapter 6) - Sun 21 Mar 2010
Love this chapter and all the rest before it! <33 I wonder though, will Sesshomaru slip and will Kagome find out, or will Inuyasha have something to do with it, OR will he tell her he is a dog demon at the end of the story/semi-end?
you need to update this! =x
that last line *giggles*
<3 miro! okay so i love this fic!
>:3 *is amused
oh la la. Things are heating up! I'm excited to see that, since it seems like they've gotten to know a decent bit about each other at this point. I'm curious to see where things go from here.
Ruriame (Chapter 5) - Sun 14 Feb 2010
I just realized I commented on two chapters at one time. Oh well. Might as well continue since I'm at it. From an earlier chapter, I like how he classified himself as a "doku" youkai so he was answering her question but not giving it away that he was an inu youkai. Miroku is still hilarious. I think you're good at writing him in different situations. And he's rubbing off on Sango too. Even better.
Ruriame (Chapter 4) - Sun 14 Feb 2010
-I am no longer a pup unable to care for myself I'm surprised she didn't notice he said "pup". I guess that's just how comfortable she was.
-“The fact that you can be acerbic is encouraging” he muttered LOL. Their dynamics are awesome.
I have enjoyed this story and can't wait to see how the dinners go. Your writing to well done and the flow is good. Hope to see more.
good story. sesshomaru is doing a good job and i hope kagome doesnt get mad when se finds out he is dog demn...lol
good job and update soon
I am really enjoying this story. Poor Sesshomaru, having to keep his tea from Kagome... I bet it's gonna come out in a memorable way! Keep up the great work!
Diane (Chapter 5) - Mon 25 Jan 2010
I like it & am looking forward to next chapter. Umm, just as an FYI, puppies need to stay with their mother & siblings for 6 to 8 weeks & really 8 to 10 or even 12 is better so they learn proper social skills. If you seperate them at 6 weeks they miss out on a bunch of life lessons that the owner will notice & have to try to correct later. I had a Cocker that was likely seperated too soon & he was kinda mouthy & broke skin a lot, it would probably be worse with an Akita, more bite force.
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