Hi! I think your story is really funny so far! But the one thing that has been bothering me is the title: Wow what an booty... Isn't it supposed to be Wow what A booty?? Was it intentional? (please dont hate this review! ^^)
Well it's not a bad start, but you keep switching from 3rd to first person, and the grammar is a little off. The idea is good though.
autumngold (Chapter 1) - Tue 20 Oct 2009
What is wrong with Kagome? She has beautiful, naked Sesshoumaru in front of her. Instead of staring at him she falls unconscience? That was a waste! :) Hopefully next time she will be able to enjoy the show! More soon please!
fatcatmom (Chapter 1) - Tue 20 Oct 2009
Great start! Poor Kagome...but what a delicious predicament to be in (grin). Please give us the next chapter soon!
Akitolover (Chapter 1) - Tue 20 Oct 2009
Really steamy! can't wait til the next chapter ^_~
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