Oooh did Sesshoumaru wish Kagome had never come to the past? O.o that is very crazy...the implications of it all...the paradoxes....the non paradoxes...will she meet him the future? Oh I so wish I knew...bwy saw the little comic strip got me to read the fic because i thought it was so neat ^-^
LEARN HOW TO SPELL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! If you are old enough to write a story with a rape scene, no matter how vague it is, you are old enough to be able to spell properly. Seriously edit your story, maybe the fact that it has so MANY grammatical errors is the reason NOONE wants to read it. It's a good plot but the grammatical errors make it almost not worth reading. This maybe hurtful to read but I am helping you in the end. If you are struggling with just a story how do you expect to do in school? Seriously reedit your story and people will read it. Or I can edit it for you. Make a comment or note or something to gain my attention with your reply. If you say yes and repost what I edit and there isn't an increase in viewers then I will apologise for my comments in another review.
this was so sad! great story, but so sad!
wickedone43 (Chapter 10) - Thu 03 Jun 2010
This is so sad!! But wow! It is great! I loved it! This is a different angle to anything I have read do far. Bravo!!!!
resoundingsilence (Chapter 10) - Fri 02 Apr 2010
is that it? that sucked. wtf that is depressing.
The premise of the story was very interesting, however I think the final draft may benefit from a beta willing to correct spelling and grammar. There are quite a few spelling errors throughout the text and they spoiled my enjoyment of the story a little. Please continue writing as I think you have some great story ideas!
April (Chapter 10) - Fri 06 Mar 2009
Oh, I so don't like the ending. It's just too terribly sad.
| This is a wonderful story
shrinemaiden05 (Chapter 10) - Sat 14 Feb 2009
| This is an amazing story.
Is this the end?
RamothsLair (Chapter 10) - Fri 13 Feb 2009
| What?! It's finished, or is the chapter finished. For that's a really sad ending. For now she doesn't remember Sesshoumaru or her own children.. But what I don't get, is why couldn't Sesshoumaru just bring them back to like with Tenseiga?
| You HAVE to update soon okay? thanks!
Two Hearts (Chapter 3) - Mon 19 Jan 2009
| I love this fanfic! update soon k
Diane (Chapter 1) - Sun 18 Jan 2009
Inuyasha's sword is the Tessaiga, unless you want to use the incorrect US version which is Tetsusaiga (I think), been so long since I've seen the US version spelled the way VIZ came up with that I'm not sure how they spelled it anymore. You may want to see if you can find a good beta since this has a whole heap of problems, spelling & word choice errors, especially where/were errors, I think you only used where correctly once in the whole thing, everything else should have been were. I remember reading this before only there was more of it, hope you get to finish the whole thing.
Chelsea Harris (Chapter 3) - Sun 18 Jan 2009
| Nice story. I mean really. There is plenty of action and mystery. Keep on updating please.
Bravo! What a lot of plot and action you have going on here! Please, please update soon!
Very exciting, lots of action, yes, I love it!
Oohh, I love it! That violent and masterful Sess. But now Kagome's on the other side of the well. Could she go back, even if she wanted to? I can't wait to find out!
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