Amazing story, keep it coming.
I really like this line: "His eyes. Denial came from his lips, yet...his eyes were guarded, as if he did believe me."
In a lot of the stories I read that are like this, Kagome usually doesn't tell Inuyasha what happened, but in this one she did. Interesting. I like what you did with it. And how you described why her eyes were like Rin's.
Ruriame (Chapter 1) - Tue 05 Jan 2010
Hehe. And you did write more. Oops. I guess this happens when I don't pay attention to scrollboxes. Off to read more now!
Ruriame (Chapter 1) - Tue 05 Jan 2010
This was an enjoyable read. The descriptions were really detailed and it was sensual in a non-lemony way, which I think can actually be pretty hard to accomplish since those things go in hand most of the time. If you decided to write more, I wouldn't mind reading it :)
I want more! PLEASE! Update soon please please!
Wow, great start so far. The first chap is my fav though. I could tell that you were taking allot of time to add in the detail. The other chapters are good as well, but shorter and not as decriptive. I look foward to seeing where you take this and how you describe your story.
serenity (Chapter 1) - Fri 25 Sep 2009
| i loved it, please do continue it... or make a sequel. its sooo hard to find stories that capture your attention so intently. you stopped right at the good part, lol. you really dont intend on leaveing it at that right?
| i'm not sure if this bit...."He turned to see the miko walk towards the wretched shrine, his face neutral. Did they not see it? Though the shrine did not exude it's dark aura, the lack of one should of warn his bastard of a brother's group.
Turning, he walked away. He would keep close to the miko, but now he needed to return to his pup-though he'd never say it aloud. Rin was at risk for illness, and needed to be watched. For now, all he could do was protect what would one day be his, after all." ... means that Kagome would one day be his, or if Rin will.. i'm really hoping its not rin, that never sits right with me. but i'm willing to keep reading.
sunset in love (Chapter 2) - Mon 19 Jan 2009
| by the way, i totally support sugar0o - NO MIX of RIN and SESSH please, i just can't get over the paternal love they shared, a love of a FATHER or PROTECTOR to a daughter, but never lovers... please, let's just keep the image of 'PROTECTOR' shall we...
sunset in love (Chapter 2) - Mon 19 Jan 2009
| wonder where will it go from here? how will the interaction between kag and sessh go? and how will inuyasha react, i really would like to see just how the ineraction will blossom...
i like this i just hope its not leaving innuendo's about a SR mix, i dunno why even when she's grown i cant stand the idea of rin and Sess. anyway i like it, more pleas!
sunset in love (Chapter 1) - Sat 10 Jan 2009
| i really think that it is a good start, not much into one-shot, rather a start of story chapters, and i must say you did well on that... but still, wether or not you chose contunuation, it's up to you, if you're ready and willing, and inspired... it will takes a lot of your times, but we'll always suport you ;-)
sunset (Chapter 1) - Sat 10 Jan 2009
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