Glad I found your newly uploaded stories. I've read from you before and have enjoyed it. I do feel some parts of the story is missing. For example, I didn't know Kagome knew Rin was Sesshomaru's adopted daughter. The reader found that out through a memory but no indication that Sesshomaru has mentioned it.
Also, the things Kagome refuses to ask like "what kind of Youkai are you?" Seems so off since she's going to have a kid with this guy.
The mood of some of the conversations seem weird. Like when Kagome and Sesshomaru were getting upset with each other at the cafe, nothing that was being said gave an indication that any of them should have been angry, so it didn't feel like it flowed.
I very much enjoyed the story and will love to continue reading. Thank you so much
OMG!!! yay!!! loved...absolutely loved this story! I cant wait to see what happens next! i hope they decide to go with the natural way of things than what they are trying to do with the IFV. hmmm this is such a great story! please update asap!
Excellent writing. Kagome is a little more polite than I imagined, but it's a nice change of pace from the stories where she's especially crass and unaware of boundaries--and more fitting for the older age you have her as here. It's been a while since I was willing to try a new story from an unfamiliar author, but your plot is also very unique. I've been reading sess/kags for almost twenty years now and it's very refreshing to see a different play on ideas. Really great work and I can't wait to see what happens next. I'm all for the slow burn build up but I also hope they finally get their feelings out in the air now. :))
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