Wonderful story! You stay true to the character's personalities while having an original and creative plot - great work! Please continue!
I really like the story, i don't think we need constant reminder that Kagome accepts everyone for who they are and not their blood. Like one time is enough.
There is also a lot of repetition through the story, like the same events, i guess you're doing different POV but it just feels like constant repetition when saying it once form a this person view could be enough and then the chapter can be spend on more time developing the characters and their relationship.
Same with mentioning Naraku and how bad he is, we got it from the first time each character said it. There is no need to constantly bring it up.
Just some suggestions to help the story flow more. The story is very good
Oooo can't wait for more :)
Anonymous (Chapter 8) - Mon 23 Jan 2023
Me pregunto, qué pensaría Lord Sesshy si viera a Hojo ( ese niño asustadizo ) babeandose por la señorita Higurashi?
Marie (Chapter 8) - Mon 23 Jan 2023
Bravo, great job. Encode! Soon please!!!
REDWOLF (Chapter 8) - Mon 23 Jan 2023
Awww how beautiful!
Woohoo!! That was an awesome chapter! That fight scene was wild! Well their yoki and reiki know what's up even if they don't.
The build-up of this chapter was AMAZING....pls update soon
REDWOLF (Chapter 7) - Wed 18 Jan 2023
This should be interesting! I wonder how long it will take to burn him?
Jasmine (Chapter 7) - Tue 17 Jan 2023
Loving this story! I really hope she wins and he has to figure out another way. Or at least tie so he's even more impressed. Do right by Kagome lol
Yasmine (Chapter 7) - Tue 17 Jan 2023
You are killing me softly with this story. Can't wait to read the next chapter!
I absolutely loved this chapter! The challenge initiated by Kagome is my favorite part! Idk how you plan to go feom there, but I am begging you to have Kagome kick his ass off his pedestal and make him the one to fall for her. Can't wait for the next update!!
LOLOLOL ! Wow! Talk about a deal with the devil! I loved this cat and mouse chapter. It was great! Thank you!
Anonymous (Chapter 7) - Mon 16 Jan 2023
Pobre mi niña! Esa apuesta ella ya la perdió.
I'm so glad that Kagome apologized by deceiving Sesshomaru Cannot wait until they start dating each other.
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