Interesting. I do hope you continue this.
Love it! Seems menacing, yet inticing.
You write in a very tantalizing way, and i can't wait to read more from his POV!
susie (Chapter 1) - Tue 04 Feb 2020
I like the first person. I like hearing his ponderings and thought process as he mulls over her. I like the way he uses her full name at the end there. I would be interested in seeing his point of view as she goes through her day, and his takes on specific things she does or says or encounters from his place on the sidelines.
Keep going!!
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