This story sounds promising and has a good foundation, but this chapter feels extremely rushed. It reads more like notes than a chapter. Like, in the beginning, we can't tell if Kagome is going to the well, or if she climbed up the well after traveling through from the future. I'm assuming that the hut Kagome walked to is Keade's, but that isn't made clear either. The walk to the West reads as if it takes almost no time, and like Sesshomaru was just standing in the forest at a property line.
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