Great beginning! Has me hooked, but when will Kagome get into the Vortex Club party? (Sorry if bad reference was just assuming there might be some Life is Strange inspiration here)
It looks interesting, chapter one and already the ball is rolling haha I like how Inuyasha is an antagonist by playing over his insecurities and jealousy, he can't act out on his impulses to attack outright but can't leave in a huff as he usually does. I bet all that stress and tense temper was cooking itself into that final explosion. Though I know he would say the words, getting physical with Kagome in canon verse is another thing entirely, but meh, who hasn't written him as such?
Very interesting, and I love the long chapter. I hope you keep them long. Please update soon.
I hate you a little! That cliffhanger is going to drive me crazy!
I really like the way you write, managing to keep the personali intact, yet introducing something new. Waiting in excitement for the next chapter!
Mona (Chapter 1) - Sun 26 Mar 2017
I hope to read more soon.
Leaora (Chapter 1) - Sun 26 Mar 2017
OH MY GOD!!!! I LOVE IT! It's fresh, it's funky, it's original, it's everything I am looking for! This seems truly inspired and is awesomely hilarious. I hope that you continue this tale quickly. I will be following.
Excellent story! "too fatty." I actually laughed out loud. Great tension between the characters. I can't wait to see where the plot goes.!
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